100 lost moments
For the keeping it 100 challenge
***I haven't done an unofficial Vocal challenge in a minute. But Lamar Wiggens posted a poem for the keeping it 100 challenge that drew me in and made me want to give it a go! Check out the link below!
I failed as a mother.
This I'll never forget.
I did the thing I swore I never would.
I became my parents...
in my own unique way.
This I would never let down.
Then I realized victimizing and shame
was not a good look on me.
Yes I failed you,
yes… I lost you.
But deep down, I just couldn't shake this feeling that I can still be better.
My mother broke a thousand promises
to me growing up.
I only had the time to break a hundred to you
before the universe said enough.
Losing you was what gave me
the motivation to be better.
So later if you become curious,
I'll be here…
Ready to do the thing never done for me.
Be better.
About the Creator
Tressa Rose
On a serious self-discovering, soul-searching journey. Breaking myself out of a stagnant shell and reaching out for my dream of being a writer.
Co-author of Bounce Back- Dreams to Reality: Faith Over Fear
https://a.co/d/98H2vCF
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Comments (5)
So what's really interesting (to me) is how hard this particular poetry visual form is to pull off (the italics, underline and bold being interspersed). I read one by a friend recently and they rather fretted because they don't really see it anywhere so I was a little excited to show it to them.
As Lamar said the raw emotion in this is absolutely flooring! I am so sorry for the circumstance that inspired by this piece, your broken heart came through so powerfully. It is such a beautifully written and vulnerable piece and I can't say how honoring it is that you would enter such a piece in the challenge.
I'm so glad you found inspiration to do the challenge. It turned out great, in a sad and heartfelt way. So much raw emotion packed in. This line hit me hard: -I only had the time to break a hundred to you before the universe said enough- 😮 Great use of the prompt and a haunting gut-punch we need sometimes. Sending hugs!
Poignantly written!!!
I enter almost all challenges once and yours is a great take on this. We also share unofficial Challenges in the Vocal Social Society as they are easy to miss on Vocal if you want to try more. Wonderful entry