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With hot, steaming breaths
you whispered, "love's forever."
Then, I felt the knife.
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Cathy holmes
Canadian family girl with a recently discovered love for writing. Other loves include animals and sports.
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Perfect Congratulations
Congratulations. This is great.
circling back for a late congrats on winning the haunted echoes challenge, Cathy!! π
Congrats Cathy! ππ
Brilliant!
That's quite the twist in your haiku, Cathy, and nothing short of chilling. Congratulations on your win!β€
I've been reading a lot of murder mysteries and psychological thrillers recently, and one of my favorite things is the plot twist I don't see coming. It's amazing you did that so well in a haiku. Congrats on your win!
Wooohooooo congratulations on your win! ππππππ
So chilling! Congrats on your win! π
Eek, Congratulations, Cathy!! You are the haiku queen ;D
ππSteam. Oh no. What is going to happen now. Maybe if I close one eye, it won't hit as hard. Love was not forever. Oh my. The knife. Yep. That will do it. This was great. Congratulations on your challenge win, Cathy π€ β€οΈ π€
Woohoo! Congratulations on the win, my friend!
ayyy congrats Cathy! chilling.
Forever love thatβs to the point. Congratulations on your win
Creeeeepy! Fantastic job, Cathy! Congrats on your win!!! π₯ π©·β¨ππ½
Congratulations on your big win!
Wow that was unexpected π¨
I'm learning to admire senryu here.
Ooooo!! So many twists in so few words, this felt sultry, dirty and then left me blow away!! Great work Cathy!!
Sensuous and terrifying, Cathy! First the lie and then the betrayal. Loved it!
You did the dang thing Cathy! This was phenomenal!
OH. I love how this is a short senryu to capture the brief, life-altering moment. Or is it....fetish? π«£π This has the feels!
The knife is always present in every relationship. The only difference being on when it's used and by who. Loved your Senryu!
This felt so real I could almost feel the blade. Great writing.
OMG! Your Senryu might be twisted but captured raw truth!