I wonder, each sundown,
If when all stills at night,
When the chores are complete,
When my fears have took flight,
If a time ever comes when
My mind is less mired,
If my thoughts will stretch out,
But no, I’m too tired,
And I drift into sleep
With worries still massing
Like cumulonimbus,
Their tendrils harassing
The edge of my dreams, so
When an angel appears,
Her wing tips are red barbed,
Her face tracked with tears.
I turn from her, frightened,
And in every direction
The flat ground is flooded,
So I see my reflection,
And the angel is there,
It is my face I see,
My tear tracks are tightening,
My barbs cutting me.
And I tell her she promised,
She wanted much more,
And I answer, how can I?
My back is so sore?
I plead with her, maybe,
If I had time to think,
If the ride would stop turning,
If I stepped off this rink,
From out of the chaos,
My truth would arise,
My beauty would surface
A golden sunrise.
“Then this is your moment
To shine” whispered she,
And baring her teeth,
Held a gun to my knee.
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Comments (16)
Wow! Amazing ending😳. Loved: “ But no, I’m too tired, And I drift into sleep With worries still massing Like cumulonimbus, Their tendrils harassing The edge of my dreams, ”✅
You rocked it! Amazing!
This was a wild ride from beginning to end. I love it!
This is good! I think I could feel a bit of Poe's vibes. "Held a gun to my knee." - I wonder if I should try and crack this metaphor or if the "knee" stands here mostly to complement a rhyming scheme. Anyways, I like it! Kind of absurd: who would hold a gun to a knee, I mean, it's not comfortable. One most probably has to bend (squat probably?) to reach for another person's knee with a gun—must be very awkward—so funny though! I definitely love this metaphor!
Wonderfully written!!! What a twist at the end!!!❤️❤️💕
Thank you for this!❤️
Dear Mrs. Hannah "Cu·mu·lo·nim·bus?" - Who, but you, would cloud us up with this marvelous entry. Jay
Your writing was really well done!
outstanding
Whoaaaa, that ending was so scary! I was not expecting that twist at all! This was such a fantastic job that you did here with this poem!
Another great piece Hannah. I loved the glow and the rhythm.
Fantastic poem!
Incredible writing and I find it so relatable! That ending is awesome!
This is powerful stuff, Hannah. And yes, shocking ending for sure. Angel as gangster, not guardian. That's a strong image.
Beautifully done -Though the ending is a bit of a shock! 🤍
Gotta love a scary angel. That's one way to make you rest alright. Awesome.