Yandere 2.0
an unexpected continuation [villanelle attempt]
I'm obsessed with you; the shadows never rest.
Each step you take, I follow close behind.
I crave your devotion deeply in my chest.
*
Your smile is sharp with a secret I detest.
No peace can soothe this fever in my mind.
I'm obsessed with you; the shadows never rest.
*
I watch, I wait, I'm your unwanted guest.
A twisted vow, I make, a love that's left unkind.
I crave your devotion deeply in my chest.
*
The world may scorn this hunger I profess,
but I won't stop, can't stop loving you so.
I'm obsessed with you; the shadows never rest.
*
A knife waits beneath my dress,
a handy gift you were meant to find.
I crave your devotion deeply in my chest.
*
The darkness keeps me steady, makes me blessed.
My name you’ll whisper, terrified, confined.
I'm obsessed with you; the shadows never rest.
I crave your devotion deeply in my chest.
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Comments (3)
Damn. Why does this already feel like you're up close and personal. Where is the other one? I am reading this one first. I went to look and couldn't find it. That might be because I am blind though. In the third tercet I started getting the creeps. The good creeps. The last line repeated. It's meaning is now sinking it's teeth into me . The knife is where now? Oh gosh. Hold my mouth shut already. Oh wait. So the knife is for him to do... Oh damn. You might as well be Juliet at this point. All lines coming together there at the end, fantastic. I think you've nailed the villanelle 🤗❤️
Oooo, I loved how dark this was!
Professing one's love.