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Introduction for "Living in MAGIC"
(Hello lovely Vocal members! I would love some feedback on this introduction for a personal development book I'm writing. Please answer honestly in the comments - Would you be intrigued enough to continue reading? Why or why not?)
By Katie Kiesling2 years ago in Critique
A Wrinkle in Time
Meg and Charles Murry’s father goes missing and they bring their friend Calvin O’Keefe to another world to fight a monster called the thing. It was nominated and won several well deserved awards. It is a great book, well written and I recommend that you read it. A great work!
By Alex H Mittelman 2 years ago in Critique
The Fighter
His eyes opened in startling fashion as the alarm clock blared on his nightstand. What should have been a wakeup call sounded more like the somber ringing of church bells. He blinked slowly, staring up at the ceiling lethargically, and for a fleeting moment he felt nothing. His hand reached haphazardly to his alarm, where, finally reaching it, the sound ceased, and he was left in total silence. He propped himself up and sat at the edge of the bed. His long legs stretched to the floor where his feet lay firmly on the ground.
By John McC2 years ago in Critique
"Unveiling the Truth: Is the Education System a Beacon of Enlightenment or a Tool for Political Agenda?"
The education system stands as a foundational element within societies, holding the enticing potential to lead us toward understanding and advancement. Yet, behind its noble appearance, a complex dynamic comes into view – a push and pull between its role in nurturing young minds with knowledge, analytical thinking, and values, and the lurking possibility of manipulation for political motives. This intricate interplay sparks a pivotal question: Can education be a radiant force, empowering individuals to shape a brighter future, or does it possess the capacity to be wielded subtly, perpetuating existing power structures?
By Satyam Magar2 years ago in Critique
The Big Short
An absolute rollercoaster of emotions from start to finish; dread, hopelessness, defeat, excitement, hope ironically enough. The Big Short has it all. A fantastic, hilarious, tragic film that's able to simplify complex wall street vocabulary, into an easily digestible and understandable message about greed and corruption. Please, watch this film.
By Dyllon Rodillon2 years ago in Critique
Wizard's Ball Game
This is Wizard's Ball (actually that's a terrible name somebody please give me some ideas for something not as laughable), the game of high speed, flying action as two teams of 6 go head to head in the air attempting to score 21 points and the match isn't over until they do!
By Michael Bivens2 years ago in Critique
The Giver by Lois Lowry
The Giver is a great book set in a dystopian future where everyone is forced to act the same and sees in black and white. The Giver eventually gives a young boy his memories from before everything was the same. The boy revolts and wants freedom to finally be different.
By Alex H Mittelman 2 years ago in Critique
Charlatan
When they get online, they look to see what they can find. Was their creativity ever there? Is it in decline? Writing isn’t hard. It comes with ease. It takes no more effort than to blow a breeze. Now we question all you’ve created. Was it yours, or just imitated?
By Atomic Historian2 years ago in Critique
Copycat
Dear Copycat, Thank you for the compliment. I really needed that. But could you try something on your own? It’s Wilde to see my work imitated. I’m not the greatest. But I really hate this when I see it. Please be more creative.
By Atomic Historian2 years ago in Critique
Divergent Movie
Divergent movie was poorly executed but I have to say intrigued me. While author Veronica Roth did not mean Divergent to be about the politically correct term Neurodivergent referring to a mind with autism like traits, it accurately depicts how society punishes people who do not think the same.
By Sid Aaron Hirji2 years ago in Critique
Peacemaker
And we're back to me talking about John Cena. I'm so glad he took the leap to hollywood. John is an incredible actor and absolutely hilarious. Yeah he's had some blunders in the past. Peacemaker is not one of them. Hilarious, violent, and shockingly deep when it wants to be.
By Dyllon Rodillon2 years ago in Critique
Unmitigated Greed
Chapter 5 “Mr. Mason, Frank Mason?” The accented male voice brought Frank back from the past. The young man speaking to him looked to be in his late teens and displayed an air of confidence not usually seen in someone so young.
By Mark Gagnon2 years ago in Critique