misdirection
and denial
I know I should’ve smelt the burning wood
But I was too focused on the taste of forgiveness, warm on my tongue
I should’ve heard the ambulance siren as it came for me
But I was too busy looking at you to see the bridge alight with flames
I didn’t even feel the sticky red seeping through my white t-shirt until it was too late and I was dying from it
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Poppy
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Outstanding
Excellent work. Looking forward to reading more!
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Excellent storytelling
Original narrative & well developed characters
Heartfelt and relatable
The story invoked strong personal emotions
The Devil's Triangle
The sails ruffled in the breeze as we cruised along. The Sea Breeze was a mid-size catamaran that sailed out of Royal Naval Dockyard in Bermuda. We had booked this trip weeks in advance and were now looking at our Captain, Spike and two boat hands. Paddy and Wilson seemed like nice guys, joking around with the passengers and telling us some stories about Bermuda that only locals would know. Their island accents sounded almost British but they were pleasant to listen to.
By Barbara Gode Wilesa day ago in Fiction
Comments (17)
Absolutely brilliant. Nicely Done!!!
Girl, you’re on track to get second in the next challenge, and win the one after that! Moving up the ranks! 🤩 Congrats on placing! This one is just amazing. I love putting myself in the speaker’s shoes, to feel the dissonance of forgiveness with utter destruction, both material and mortal. Just brilliant. It doesn’t even need to be a Sensational one; it speaks like it was always meant to be written like this.
Wow. This is incredible! Congrats! 🏆
Well deserved placing in the challenge ✅🤩.
Wooohooooo congratulations on your win! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
Wooohooo!! Congrats on Runner up in the challenge Poppy!! 🎉
Wow, Poppy! TBH, I'm not sure this placed high enough. Congratulations!
Congratulations on the runner up win!!!🥰🥰🥰
Congrats, Poppy.
Congrats on the win, indeed an impressive poem👏👏👏
Oh!! That sense of betray that seeps through all the other sensations!! What a vibe, in the worst way!!! But so well written!! Great work Poppy!!
This poem haunts and reverberates deeply....sadly, poetically lovely.
Sad, but beautiful. Well done.
Another excellent poem with the five senses ✅
You painted a vivid picture and a deep story in so few lines. Impressive!!
So many layers to this, I love this type of writing!
That's a great work! Very deep lines 😞