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The Midnight Society
When I was just thirteen years old, I had the idea for this story. It was full of corruption, espionage, world politics, and maybe just slightly too ambitious for a kid. But I loved writing it. The research for how political power works, types of governments and their function, cold wars and espionage was endlessly fascinating. Crafting plot twist after plot twist, betrayal after betrayal, characters so real I could almost see them sitting before me was what gave me my kick start into writing. It got complicated, and twisted, and I was horrible at keeping up with notes, so I lost the trail of the plot and the enthusiasm to continue it.
By Sarah Massey2 years ago in Critique
A YA Story Looking for Input
*** This is basically an excerpt from a YA/Upper Middle grade story looking for critique.*** My main questions would be - from the perspective of a reader of this genre - does the story grab your attention? What needs to be added to make it more interesting? And, of course, if you notice any grammatical errors or clumsy sentences, feel free to point them out also. Add any critiques to the comment section, or PM if you would like it to be kept more quiet.
By KJ Aartila2 years ago in Critique
Sun & Sand. Top Story - August 2023.
Evan Forrester stalked up the beach and to the beachside bar at least six steps ahead of Katie. This left plenty of room for people to not believe that they were a pair and those people innocently cut in between the two people as groups either made their ways back to the beach or up to the bar as well. A few of them were kind enough to mumble “excuse me” or “pardon me.” No one hung back and allowed her to catch back up with Evan; no one knew about the infractions that they were committing. No; it was the young group of college aged males who knowingly and indiscreetly stared at her to size her up that really bothered the brunette beauty. Had it been in her nature, she might have flipped them off. Today, she was dangerously close to that being in her nature.
By Kent Brindley2 years ago in Critique
AI sums up Vocal Media
ChatGPT and Vocal Media I am getting used to ChatGPT but find it is not always accurate and I have to do additional research. This is why I utilize it sparingly. Today I decided to find out what Artificial Intelligence would tell me about Vocal Media and found it to be quite accurate. The following is what it had to say and perhaps someone else may catch a glitch or inaccuracy that I did not.
By Cheryl E Preston2 years ago in Critique
Advice Needed: A Yam's Tale
Hello there, everyone! I am once again taking another break from my regularly scheduled fiction to publish something in the new critique community. It was created by Vocal at a perfect time for me as, sat within my memory stick, a small story opening has existed. The problem with it is... I have no idea where to go with it!
By ThatWriterWoman2 years ago in Critique
Builderall 5.0 vs. Rapid Profit Machine: Choosing the Perfect Digital Marketing Duo
In the ever-evolving landscape of digital marketing, having the right tools at your disposal can make all the difference in achieving success. Two powerful contenders that have been gaining traction are Builderall 5.0 and Rapid Profit Machine (RPM). These platforms promise to transform your digital marketing endeavors and take your business to new heights. In this comprehensive guide, we'll delve into the features, benefits, and user experiences of Builderall 5.0 and Rapid Profit Machine, helping you make an informed choice for your digital marketing needs.
By XcellentWrite2 years ago in Critique
Crisis in the Amazon
Are we living our lives as if every day is a new fairytale unfolding. Granted, some fairy tales are far more wonderful for some than for others. There are people surviving day to day in not so fairytale like conditions, yet are doing more for the ecological survival of the planet than those who seem completely oblivious to warnings of "Less is More". If we are to continue to survive safely, we need to wake up to the reality of that which is unfolding around us. This is not a storied fairytale.
By Novel Allen2 years ago in Critique
A Sapphic Story I wrote in 2008
Carol Patience sighed as her back was fixed against the purple sheets on the bed. The seventeen year old thought it was a very strange way to celebrate her birthday. Lying on her bed, semi naked whilst her girlfriend, was somewhere around the flat. Carol stood up and stared at herself at the rectangle shaped mirror on the wall. She certainly noticed that her changes from two years ago. Never would she have thought that she would have a girlfriend, around twice her age. Carol was fourteen when she first met Grace Butterfly, after being bit by a snake and found her self out of planet earth.
By Chloe Gilholy2 years ago in Critique
